TV Commercial

by Gary Ross Hoffman

Scene: Night, interior, a bedroom. Dim light source. Two people asleep in a bed.

Sound: A faint growling sound.

One of the sleepers, a woman, opens her eyes and sits up in the bed. She strains to hear the faint sounds.

Sound: Growling increases in volume.

The woman gets out of bed and fumbles for a robe.

New scene: Night, interior, hallway. Long shot of the woman at the far end of the dark hall.

The woman turns on the hall light. She slowly walks down the hall, listening.

Sound: The growling gets louder.

The woman looks apprehensive. She approaches a door covered with crayoned pictures and movie posters, obviously a child's room.

Sound: The growling stops.

With a trembling hand, the woman reaches for the doorknob of the child's room. She grasps and turns it slowly.

New camera angle: Closeup of woman's face very close to the door, which is partially open. There is a snarling, wolf-like face inches from her own.

Sound: Very loud growling and snarling.

The woman, panic on her face, struggles to pull the door closed. The creature on the other side struggles to open it. The creature succeeds in yanking the door all the way open. The woman, still clutching the doorknob, is pulled violently into the room.

New scene: Interior of the child's room, which is in disarray. Varying light source from an overturned lamp. Constantly moving shadows.

Sounds: Panicky short cries from the woman. Half barks, half growls from the creature.

The woman crouches, looking for a way out of the room. The exit is blocked by a hideous half-man, half-wolf creature which is snarling at her. The creature tries to approach her.

New camera angle: Shot of the complete room.

The creature lunges towards the woman.

New camera angle: Upper body shot of the woman.

She dodges just in time and the creature misses her.

New camera angle: Very quick shot of the woman's hand snatching a baseball bat from the floor.

New camera angle: The door as seen from the inside of the child's room.

The woman dashes through the door. The creature is right behind her.

New scene: Back in the hallway.

The woman starts to run down the hallway, away from the viewer. The creature chases after her.

New camera angle: Close to the back of the woman, upper body shot.

The woman suddenly turns, panic and desperation on her face. She swings the bat.

New camera angle: Longer shot of the hallway, viewing the back of the creature. The woman can barely be seen beyond it.

Sound: Loud thud.

The creature topples over backwards, towards the viewer. The woman rushes forward and straddles the fallen body.

New camera angle: Creature's-eye view, looking up at the woman from the floor.

The woman repeatedly swings the bat down towards the viewer.

Sounds: Repeated fleshy thuds and the woman gasping.

New camera angle: Long shot of the woman straddling the creature's body.

The woman drops the bat and lowers her head. She tries to catch her breath. After a few moments, she slowly stands up and walks down the hallway, away from the viewer. The creature does not stir.

New camera angle: Creature's-eye view, looking up at the woman from the floor. She is once again straddling the creature's body. She is holding a medicine bottle and a spoon. The spoon approaches the viewer.

New camera angle: Reverse of the previous camera angle, now the woman's-eye view looking down at the creature. Her hand is visible. It is holding a spoon and is moving away from the creature's mouth, as if she had just fed it something.

New camera angle: Closeup of the creature's face.

Special effect: The creature's face morphs into the face of a little boy.

New scene: Inside the child's bedroom. The room has been straightened, the lighting is normal. The little boy is in the bed. The woman, no longer in disarray, is tucking him in.

Woman: "Feel better, honey?"

Little boy: "Yeah, Mom, thanks."

The woman kisses the little boy and turns out the light.

Special effect: Product logo appears over the scene.

Narrator: "Saint Joe's Were-Wort, for those nights when he just can't sleep."


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